I’m pretty late today and going to send this off in the email with the Fandom Pulse Daily Briefing so it doesn’t double up on emails right away, so hopefully you've checked it!
One Issue: I'm not sure if you properly introduced Pellow and Haskett"s names properly. They were described physically, but no one mentioned them by name.
Nice. The stones pick instead of a dusty old hat.
A ferry instead of a train and bees talking to the provost.
Oh, you might wanna fix something.
Corinne walked up like she owned the platform (like she owned it.) You duplicated the owning of the platform.
One Issue: I'm not sure if you properly introduced Pellow and Haskett"s names properly. They were described physically, but no one mentioned them by name.
"What with C words" indeed.
Keep writing, we'll keep reading